Wednesday, 19 December 2012

Year 6 Reading Homework

This extract is from Escape from Shangri-La by Michael Morpurgo:

I called out for him as loudly as I dared. The moon slipped behind a cloud and the world darkened suddenly. A warm shiver of fear crept up the back of my neck. I went below. The cabin door was still locked. I felt for and found the key in the tea tin. Popsicle was definitely not there.

Popsicle and Cessie have decided that they must sail to France to see if Lucie Alice is still alive. In this extract, Cessie has arrived at the boat to meet Popsicle so that they can sneak away in the night.

Task:

  • How does Michael Morpurgo create suspense in the extract?
  • Write a '3 mark' response to the question.
  • Use PEE (point, evidence, explain) to structure your answer.
Response due by Friday 11th January 2013.

86 comments:

  1. Robyn Olivey12/19/2012 5:13 pm

    By having lost of strange going on's."The moon slipped behinde a cloud and the world darkened. A warm shiver of fear crept up my neck." I think that this creates suspence because there is some descriptive and powerfull words in there like "sliped behind" and " A warm shiver crept up my back."Also by having short and snappy sentences."I went below.""Popcicle was defenitly not there." I think that this creates suspence because short sentences make it feel spookey.My last reason is making the sentences powerfull."I called out for him as loudly as I dared." This creates suspence because the sentences help you picture it more in your head. It also has lots of adjectives in the sentences.

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    1. Robyn, you have chosen a couple of very descriptive parts of the quotation that definitely create suspense. Could you explain more clearly cloud, darkened, shiver and crept etc. creates suspense?

      I agree that short sentences create suspense! Well done!

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  2. Harry Durrant12/19/2012 6:41 pm

    Michael Morporgo created a suspense in the extract by putting in "I called for him as loudly as I dared," which could of been a whisper because Cessie only wanted Popsicle to answer back, not anyone else( if there are any others about.)

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    1. Harry, you have used a quote from the extract to justify your answer. Well done! There are other ways in Morpurgo creates suspense. What do you think they are?

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  3. Bethan Bright12/23/2012 3:45 pm

    Michael Morpurgo created a suspense in the extract by putting in"I called for him as loudly as I dared," Which could mean that Cessie was to scared to shout any louder. Also by creating a suspense, Michael put "The moon slipped behinde a cloud and the world darkened. A warm shiver of fear crept up the back of my neck." This also creates a suspense by having some powerful words in it. :D

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    1. He used descriptive words and sentences to create suspence, E.g 'The moon slipped behind a cloud and the world darkened,' and 'as loud as I dared.' He also used short sentences like 'I went below,' and 'Popsicle was definitely not there,' to make it more exiting.

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  4. Zofia Fijalkowska12/31/2012 1:40 pm

    Michael Morpurgo created suspense in this extract by using short sentences, e.g:'I went below. The cabin door was still locked. I felt for and found the key in the tea tin.' I think this makes you feel the suspense, because they are short, snappy, to the point and create an atmosphere.
    Also, Michael Morpurgo created suspense by using detail to help you picture it more in your head, and when you get a better picture in your head you often feel more suspense (because it feels more real). He used this in these sentences:'The moon dipped behind a clouds and the world darkened suddenly. A warm shiver of fear crept up the back of my neck.'

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    1. Zofia, you have used PEE to structure your answer. Well done. You explain your points very clearly and you use evidence from the text to support your opinion.

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  5. Henry Butler12/31/2012 8:55 pm

    He creates suspense by using short sentences."I called out for him ad loudly as I dared"

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    1. Henry, this answer is too short to gain three marks. It bares the hallmark of somebody who was trying to get this work out of the way very quickly. You need more depth to your answer.

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    2. Henry Butler1/09/2013 12:49 pm

      Michael Morpurgo creates suspense by using short sentences to make you read quicker'I called out for him as loudly as I dared'This might mean there was somebody there listening.'I went below'is also a suspense creater.

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  6. Ben Gasse-Coope1/04/2013 11:27 am

    To create suspense Michial Morpurgo has used great vocabulary. We know this because the text states "A warm shiver of fear crept up the back of my neck" This creates suspence because the words help you picture the scene better. Also if you can picture the scene better it helps you to obtain the feelings of the character.

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    1. Ben, I understand that great vocabulary might well create suspense, but which particular words create suspense and how?

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  7. michael morpurgo creates suspense by the words he uses eg "The moon sliped behind a cloud and the world was darkened suddenly."
    I thought this sentence creates because it was descriptive

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    1. Rhys, description doesn't always create suspense, but in this case it might. Think more deeply and try to explain why the description creates suspense.

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  8. Josh Doherty1/04/2013 3:27 pm

    Michael Morpurgo uses short snappy sentences to create suspence.

    e.g. A warm shiver crept up the back of my neck, also another one the moon
    slipped behind a cloud and the world darkened suddenly.

    I think the two sentences i chose created suspence by the words that are used like suddenley and a WARM shiver.

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    1. Josh, you're correct. Short snappy sentences help create suspense. But how? I wonder if you can explain?

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  9. Phoebe Boreham1/05/2013 10:47 am

    I think Michael Morpurgo creates suspense by using short,snappy sentences,like:I went below.The cabin door was still locked.I felt for and found the key in the tea tin.Popsicle was definitely not there.
    I Also think that those sentences help to make an atmosphere too.
    Also the words and phrases he chooses,like:The world darkened,and,A warm shiver of fear crept up the back of my neck,help make suspense too.

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    1. Miss Fletcher1/15/2013 10:41 am

      Well done Phoebe, you have structured your answer really well to gain 3 marks. I agree that he short sentences, along with the chosen vocabulary, do create suspense really well. A great answer.

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  10. He created suspense by creating a dark atmosphere "The moon slipped behind the cloud and the world darkened suddenly" He also had to feel around for the key "I felt for and found the key in the tea tin"
    He used the word dared,so i knew he was scared "I called out for him as loudly as i dared"
    He used dramatic words and sets a scene by using,slipped behind,darkened suddenly and shivers ran down my spine.This helps you picture the story better.

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    1. Miss Fletcher1/15/2013 10:48 am

      Well done Hettie, you identified words and sentences used to create suspense and used them as evidence in your answer.
      However you could have also commented on the use of short sentences, which are also a suspense building technique.

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  11. the moon slipped behind a cloud and the world darkened suddenly.A warm shiver of fear crept up my neck.He has created suspense by using worlds like slipped, darkened and shiver.He also uses suspense by using short sentences this may help give a better picture of what he is feeling and if you know roughly what he is feeling it will help you understand the story better.

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    1. Miss Fletcher1/15/2013 10:52 am

      Yes Adam I agree, the vocabulary chosen creates suspense, and so does the use of short sentences. Remember to show you are using quotes from the text with inverted commas. A good answer.

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  12. Danny Morgan1/06/2013 4:55 pm

    The author, Michael Morpurgo, creates suspense by using describing words such as 'loudly', 'darkened' and 'warm shiver'. These types of words make a picture in my head while I am reading and I can understand how Cessie is feeling. For example, the sentence "a warm shiver of fear crept up the back of my neck" makes me think that Cessie is scared. Michael Morpurgo also uses short sentences which makes me want to read quickly to find out what is going to happen.

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    1. Danny, this is a very well explained answer. You have used evidence from the text and stretched yourself a bit further to really explain how suspense is created.

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  13. Sebastian Woloch1/06/2013 7:39 pm

    In the extract Michael Morpurgo created a good suspense because he used a lot of description of what is happening with the character and what she feels. "I called out for him as loudly as I dared." I think this sentence created suspense because we find out that the girl may be afraid of something. This is suggested by "as loudly as I dared" because if she would not be scared she would just call him very loudly. "The moon sliped behind a cloud and the world was darkened suddenly." this shows that there is a sudden change of atmosphere, that something scary might happen. Also the description of how Cessie felt when the moon went behind the clouds shows us the feeling of tension. I think that short sentences shows suspense in the text too. "I went below." it feels like Cessie was holding her breath and quickly gets down the stairs to check if Popcicle was there.

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  14. To create suspense Michial Morpurgo has used a grate use of words.For instance "the moon slipped behind a cloud and the world was darkened suddenly."

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    1. But how does his choice of words create suspense? You need to explain further.

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  15. Holly Hardingham1/07/2013 12:16 pm

    By using descriptive words to create an atmosphere he describes the moon
    slipping behind a cloud and the world darkening. Also using words such as suddenly, shiver and fear, and short sentences like "I went below"create a sense a fear and sentences such as " I called out of him as loudly as i dared" helps you understand how frightend the character is.

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  16. charlotte hardingham1/07/2013 12:17 pm

    by using descriptive words to create an atmosphere he describes the moon slipping behind a cloud and the world darkening.Also using words such as suddenly , shiver , fear and short sentences like "i went below" ,create a sense of fear and sentences such as " i called out for him as loudly as i dared ". helps you understand how frightened the character is .

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  17. Luke Brierley1/07/2013 4:10 pm

    "The moon slipped behind a cloud and the world darkened suddenly."
    This sentence is creating suspense because the words darkened suddenly are both strong words.This is because it tell's you that it diden't darken slowly it darkened quikly and spookily.

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    1. Luke, I like they way that you have chosen a particularly tense sentence and explained how it creates suspense. I'm not sure 'strong words' is specific enough.

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  18. The writer uses descriptive words in sentences such as "LOUDLY as I dared", "the world DARKENED suddenly" and "a warm SHIVER of fear" which creates a dark and frightening picture in the readers mind.

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    1. Miss Fletcher1/15/2013 10:57 am

      Yes Leah, the choice of vocabulary does create suspense, but can you explain how?
      Does the author use any other techniques to create suspense?

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  19. Ellie Bywater1/07/2013 7:27 pm

    Michael Morpurgo used short snappy sentences like " I called out for him as loudly as I dared."this sentence also adds a scared effect to the reader, if
    Cessie wasn't scared then the extract wouldn't of said "I called out for him
    AS LOUDLY AS I DARED"

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    1. Ok, so Cessie is scared and doesn't dare call out too loudly. That makes the reader scared. I agree that short sentences create suspense, but how?

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  20. Jasmine Hume1/07/2013 7:49 pm

    Michel Morpurgo has created suspense when it suddenly went dark because it says that "The moon slipped behind a cloud and the world darkened suddenly."
    This means she must of been afraid of the darkness on her own.
    Also, it sent shivers down the back of her neck due to the fact, it says "a warm shiver of fear crept up the back of my neck." That means that she was scared and. I also agree, with robyn that short sentences are effective as they set the scary side of the scene. Lastly, she was afraid of being heard because it says "I would only shout as loudly as I dared."

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    1. You have certainly got enough parts to your answer to be awarded three marks. You have also used evidence from the text. I'm not sure that you have fully explained how suspense is created Jasmine.

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  21. TO create suspense he uesd descriptive words.for intance"A warm shiver of fear crept up my back.i went below.

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    1. But how does the use of descriptive words create suspense Myron?

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  22. to create suspens michie morpergo has when it just whent dark because it said the moon sliped behind a cloud and the word darcend sudenly. sh must be scared of somthingwathing her and she is on her own

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    1. Dylan, take your time to read your answer before you post it. There are several words with letters missing; you haven't used any capitals; there are several words that you have spelled incorrectly that are in the quotation. Take care and pride in your work.

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  23. Michael Morpurgo created suspense by the quotes "i called out for him as loudly as i dared" meaning that Cessie didn't dare shout too loud just incase anybody else was on the boat and heard her,also "a warm shiver of fear crept up the back of my neck" using this sentence makes the reader know that Cessie was afraid because it was dark and nobody had answered her call.Also in the sentence "the cabin door was still locked" using the word still means she expected it to be unlocked and because she had to feel around for the tea tin with the key in means it was so dark she could not see and finding the key still in the tin is when she definitely knows Popsicle is not there.


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    1. Alana, well done! You have chosen appropriate parts of the text and explained clearly how they are effective in creating suspense.

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  24. The sentence I think created suspence was, "A warm shiver of fear crept up the back of my neck" it made me feel like something was going to happen and I think it was going to be something bad because of the short descriptive words making me wonder what is going to happen next.

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    1. You have explained your choice of quotation well Jay. Are there other parts of the quotation that are effective in creating suspense?

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  25. Klaudia Masternak1/09/2013 6:08 pm

    Michael Morpurgo created suspense by using short sentenes:'I went below. The cabin door was still locked. I felt for and found the key in the tea tin.Michael Morpurgo use's sort and snappy sentenes to create an better atmosphere.

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    1. Klaudia, you have identified short sentences as a method of creating suspense. Well done! I wonder if you can explain what it is about short sentences that makes them useful for writers who want to create suspense?

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  26. George Woodrow1/09/2013 6:21 pm

    I think the author of the extract, Michael Morpurgo, has created suspense in many ways. 1. He has used short snappy sentences like, "I went below" and "Popsicle was definitely not here." It creates spookiness and makes you want to read more. 2. It's like a TV in your head as you try to picture it and it's quite scary. 3. Sentences like, "The moon slipped like a cloud and the word darkened." and "A warm shiver of fear crept up the back of my neck," create an awesome effect and builds suspense.

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    1. George, I like the way that you have used numbers to clearly separate the three parts of your answer. Think about number three. How does the quote create an awesome effect?

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  27. I think Michael Morpurgo created suspense by the short and snappy sentences like "i called out for him as loudly as i dared" meaning that Cessie didnt dare to shout to loud because if he shouted any louder then there could be other people on the boat and they could hear him shouting for Popsicle.also "a warm shiver up the back of fear crept up the back of my neck"i think that he used this sentence because it explains clearly what he feels like.Also using this sentence i think maybe the reader know that Cessie was afraid because it was dark damp and nobody was there with her...

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    1. Sian, you have really explained why "I called out for him as loudly as I dared" creates suspense clearly! Very good! Your explanations are improving!

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  28. The author Michael Morpurgo creates suspense by using descriptive word like "as loudly as I dared" ,"the moon slipped behind a cloud" and "a warm shiver of fear". I think this is how he used suspense because it makes me feel like something horrible is going to happen because short descriptive sentence give it a bad vibe.

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    1. Elliot, you have used PEE very clearly in your answer. Well done!

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  29. Morrin Purdy1/09/2013 8:16 pm

    Michael Morpurgo has created suspense in the extract by using powerful descriptions like "A warm shiver of fear crept up the back of my neck."
    to describe the way the people are feeling. Also by using short sentences creates a picture in your head like " I felt for and found the key in the tea tin."

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    1. You have identified parts of the text to use as evidence for your ideas Morrin. Well done!

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  30. jenna stephenson1/09/2013 8:30 pm

    Micheal Morpurgo, created suspence by using the phrases the moon slipped behind a cloud and the world darkend suddenly also a nother on a warm shiver of fear crept up the back of my neck.I think that becase it says use suspence in are ansers so obviousley we hade to take evidence from the text and that is a suspence i sure a sespence is what i have done EG the moon slipped behind a cloud and the world darkend suddenly.

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    1. Try to explain why the quotations that you have chosen create an atmosphere of suspense. Suspense is a feeling, not an object. So try not to call it a suspense. You have picked some quality quotations!

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  31. jenna stephenson1/09/2013 8:42 pm

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  32. Daniel Viles1/09/2013 8:52 pm

    I think that Michael Morpurgo is trying to make us think that the characters felt fear, for example a warm shiver of fear crept up the back of my neck he sets the scene with the words the moon slipping behind the cloud and the world darkened suddenly .So my point is that Michael is making this part scary by using those lines.

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    1. Miss Fletcher1/15/2013 10:55 am

      Yes Daniel I agree that the author creates suspense with the vocabulary chosen, and you used quotes to support your answer, which is good. Remember to use inverted commas to show your quotes.
      Are there other ways he has created suspense do you think?

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  33. Olivia Hickford1/09/2013 9:06 pm

    I think Michael Morpurgo creates suspense by using short sentences. "I went below. The cabin door was locked." These sentences create the feeling something is going to happen. He also uses words like slipped to use effect. "The moon slipped behind a cloud. A shiver of fear crept up the back of my neck." Instead of saying Went behind a cloud he says slipped behind a cloud. And instead of saying went up the back of my neck he uses the word crept.

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    1. Olivia, you have commented well on Morpurgo's use of powerful verbs such as slipped and crept. Those words certainly create suspense much more effectively than went! Well done!

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  34. Abigail Brook1/09/2013 9:09 pm

    Michael Morpurgo creates suspense in his writing by using short snappy sentences like "I went below" and "Popsicle was definately not there." He also uses lots of adjectives to help create a spooky scene like "darkened suddenly" "The moon slipped behind a cloud" "the world darkened suddenly" "a warm shiver of fear" these all make it spooky and mysterious. he also uses words to help us feel like we are there like "as loudly as i dared" meaning that Cessie didn't dare shout too loud, just in case there was anybody else was on the boat to hear her.

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    1. Abigail, you certainly have three parts to your answer. All of the parts use the PEE (point, evidence, explain) structure effectively. Well done!

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  35. Year 6, I love reading these answers on the blog. Michael Morpurgo is a skilled writer to create an image of the moon slipping behind the cloud like a thief crawling off in the night, stealing the brightness, plunging the world into dangerous darkness. I haven't read this book for a while but I know instantly that Popsicle's disappearance is both startling and significant. The short sentence is an excellent way to end a paragraph.
    Keep up the good work all of you, you're getting much better at answering these questions.
    Mr de Neve (with Lola (kitten) trying to catch the cursor as I type!)

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  36. Michael Morpugo has created supersence because he makes it more intresting for the reader, eg the cloud covering the moon is better than saying just a ordanary moon. He has used very good explanation and interesting words.

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  37. Michael Morpurgo has used suspense by using short snappy sentences,"the world darkened suddenly"."The cabin door was still locked". I think that those sentences help create atmosphere too.
    Some of the words and phrases he chooses,"The world darkened,and,A warm shiver of fear crept up the back of my neck",helped me get a picture in my head thus making me believe it more.

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    1. Thomas, your snaswers are becoming more detailed and certainly clearer. You have explained your thoughts well and used quotations to justify your answer.

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  38. Nat-han Durrant1/10/2013 4:20 pm

    He creates suspense like from the sentence "I shouted as loud as I dared" which makes you want to know what happen's next.A warm shiver crept up my back:makes me think that Cessie is feeling worried and scared.

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  39. Michael mentions his emotions in the extract because he describes his sense of fear and how he felt in the atnmosphere (I shouted for him as luod as i dared and the place was in darkness)

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  40. Lauren Turner1/10/2013 5:02 pm

    I think Michael Morpurgo has created suspense by using short snappy sentences.It keeps the reader interested and makes them want to find out what happens next,also it puts a better picture into peoples mind of what it would be like to be in that situation themselves.The short sentences gets the readers heart beating faster which has a knock on effect. Michael Morpurgo has also used a lot of descriptive words and phrases to describe the scene.

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  41. Kayleigh Gowers1/10/2013 5:11 pm

    I like this book because of the language used and the description. It is also makes you imagine what it looks like in your head.

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  42. jake stannard1/10/2013 6:43 pm

    The description is really good like fear crept up on the back of my neck it really puts a image in your head its a good peice of descripition

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  43. Nicky Farrar1/10/2013 6:49 pm

    The suspense is where Michel murpurgo said in the sentence " The moon slipped behind a cloud and the world darkened suddenly" because its a good word and you can imagine the story.Also this as-well "I called out for him as loudly as I dared"It is a good story!

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  44. Daniel Masters1/10/2013 7:04 pm

    He uses words like "shiver", "darkened", and "fear" to make me feel scared and creeped out. He also writes in short sentences which all builds up the scene and the suspense like "I went below. The cabin door was still locked."

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    1. Miss Fletcher1/15/2013 11:03 am

      Yes Daniel I agree well done.
      Can you explain further just HOW the short sentences build the suspense?

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  45. Sean davison1/10/2013 8:29 pm

    Michael Morpurgo has created suspense by making it go suddenly dark and using words like fear and shiver.
    In the extract it says "I called out for him as loudly as I dared" it made me think that she was very scared and couldn't shout too loudly in case somebody else heard.

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  46. I think Michael Morpurgo creates suspense by using good vocabular. EG "I shouted for him as loud as i dared" this creates suspense because it makes me want to read on to see what happened! He also uses some powerful words Eg The moon .slipped. behind a cloud and the world .darkened suddenly. This creates suspense because of the powerful words "slipped" and "darkened suddenly."

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  47. I like this book because of the speech used in the description and it makes you imagine it in your head

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  48. Courtney Scott1/13/2013 4:33 pm

    Michael Morpurgo has created suspense by using great vocabulary in the description, for example "I shouted for him as loud as I dared" makes the reader want to read on.Also the powerful verbs are a great way to create suspense Eg: "The moon slipped behind a cloud and the world darkened suddenly".Finally, the author uses sort and simple sentences to build up tension, "I went below.The cabin door was still locked.".

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  49. myron robson1/13/2013 7:32 pm

    michael morpurgo creates suspense by making you want to read on E.G
    the moon slipped behind the clouds and the world suddenly darkened.
    A warm shiver of fear crept up my back.this makes you want to read on.

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  50. jake armstrong1/16/2013 6:36 am

    michel morpurgo creates suspence by using great words like shouted for him as loud as he dared,make the readerwant to read on.Also the powerful verbs like The moon slipped behind the clouds and the world darkened suddenly.And michel morpurgo used short sentences to built up tension,I went bellow.The cabin door was still locked.

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  51. Group Feedback.

    Here is an example of a well structured three mark answer:

    Firstly, an atmosphere of suspense is created by using very short sentences: "I went below." "The cabin door was locked." Short sentences start and stop quickly. This is similar to a fast heartbeat in a tense situation.

    Secondly, powerful verbs have been used: "slipped, darkened, crept." The verbs dark and creep creates an 'edge of your seat' atmosphere that couldn't be achieved with a less powerful verb like went.

    In a SATS test, two different points with evidence and a clear explanation would be awarded three marks.

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    1. To save you time in the SATS reading test, you could be more brief with your answer:

      1. short sentences: "I went below." Short sentences start and stop quickly similar to a fast heartbeat in a tense situation.

      2. powerful verbs:The verbs dark and creep creates an 'edge of your seat' type of suspense that couldn't be achieved with a less powerful verb like went.

      You need to find a balance between: including enough detail to collect three marks, but not wasting time by making your answer too wordy.



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  52. michel morpurgo created suspens by using pouwerful words like shouted insted of said or say.

    also he has used ajectival phrases like slipped behind a cloud and she souted as lou as she deard.

    he used short sentences inbertwean compound and complex to billed suspens in the story.

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